questions/index.yaml

@@ -1,10 +1,9 @@
 id: /
 name: What shapes us?
 description: >
-  redoal is a gesture-addressed network — a small network that works
-  without the things you think a network needs. Draw a line and it
-  becomes an address: not a username, not a dot-com, the drawing
-  itself. Similar drawings land near each other, and everything else
+  redoal is a gesture-addressed network. Draw a line and it becomes
+  an address — the drawing itself, ready to use the moment your hand
+  lifts. Similar drawings land near each other, and everything else
   follows from that. Draw one below and see who's near.
 responsible:
   name: Bendik Aagaard Lynghaug
@@ -42,71 +41,66 @@ alternatives:
             type: email
             optional: true
 
-  - name: Meet a network with no list and no landlord
+  - name: Meet a network you carry in your hand
     description: >
-      The one trick, and what falls out of it — the parts that run
-      today, said plainly. The longer version is the zine: printed,
-      folded, and left in the gallery.
+      The one trick, and what it enables — the parts that run today,
+      said plainly. The longer version is the zine: printed, folded,
+      and left in the gallery.
     features:
       - name: A drawing is an address
         description: >
           The computer measures how your line curves, turns, and keeps
           rhythm, and boils it down to a twenty-byte fingerprint.
           Similar drawings get similar fingerprints — two spirals land
-          like two houses on the same street, a zigzag on another
-          street entirely. The fingerprint even draws itself back:
-          a lo-fi sketch of the shape, with zero network calls.
+          like two houses on the same street. The fingerprint even
+          draws itself back: a lo-fi sketch of the shape, straight
+          from the key.
         icon: lucide:map-pin
-      - name: Nobody keeps the list
+      - name: Your machine asks the room
         description: >
-          On the internet you know, finding anyone goes through a
-          middleman who keeps the list of names and remembers that
-          you asked. Here your machine asks the machines around it,
-          "has anyone been near this shape?" Nothing is registered
-          anywhere, with anyone.
+          To find someone, your machine asks the machines around it:
+          "has anyone been near this shape?" Your spiral finds my
+          spiral directly, peer to peer. The whole directory is the
+          shapes people know, passed along on a napkin.
         icon: lucide:users
       - name: Voices stay where you left them
         description: >
           A drawing is a place, and places hold voices. Listen to the
           recordings people left at a gesture, leave your own on top,
-          and if someone stands at the same drawing right now, just
-          talk — live, machine to machine, no company carrying the
-          words.
+          and when someone stands at the same drawing right now, just
+          talk — live, machine to machine.
         icon: lucide:mic
-      - name: A seal, not a sign-in
+      - name: Sealed by your own hand
         description: >
-          Every recording and every stored stroke is sealed with a
-          signature from the leaver's own machine. Not a name — there
-          are no names here — just proof that nothing was altered and
-          that the same hand made the same things. Delete the key and
-          you were never here.
+          Every recording and every stored stroke carries a signature
+          from the leaver's own machine — proof that it arrived
+          intact and that the same hand made the same things. The key
+          lives only with you: keep it and you're recognized, delete
+          it and you were never here.
         icon: lucide:stamp
       - name: Twenty-four words
         description: >
           Teaching these machines a new behaviour takes a language of
           exactly twenty-four keywords. "When a voice starts, keep what
           you hear; when it stops, leave it at this drawing" is about
-          240 bytes on the wire — and the language has no word for
-          reading your files or phoning home. You don't have to trust
-          the author; you can check the dictionary.
+          240 bytes on the wire — small enough to read in full, so you
+          can check the dictionary instead of trusting the author.
         icon: lucide:book-open
-      - name: Nothing that reads
+      - name: Draw and speak, and you're in
         description: >
-          No accounts, no servers, no feed, and almost no text: the
-          primitives are the drawn line and the human voice. A child,
-          an elder, or a newcomer who doesn't read the local script is
-          in on the same terms as everyone else — if you can draw and
-          you can speak, you're in.
+          The primitives are the drawn line and the human voice. A
+          child, an elder, or a newcomer still learning the local
+          script arrives on the same terms as everyone else — that is
+          the whole entry requirement.
         icon: lucide:hand
       - name: Young, and honest about it
         description: >
-          A prototype and an artwork before it is a product, made for
-          the program «big tech skal vekk». The gesture math, the
-          fingerprints, the voice recordings, and the machine-to-machine
-          fetching are real and running; the transport that reaches
-          across the internet is still being built. The edges are
-          rough, and the edges are where the interesting questions
-          live.
+          A prototype and an artwork first, made for the program «big
+          tech skal vekk». The gesture math, the fingerprints, the
+          voice recordings, and the machine-to-machine fetching are
+          real and running; the transport that reaches across the
+          internet is being built now. The edges are rough, and the
+          edges are where the interesting questions live.
         icon: lucide:sprout
 
   - name: Follow the build as it lands

questions/shape.yaml

@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@ alternatives:
           In the full network a drawing is a place that holds voices —
           recordings left by whoever came before, and live talk with
           whoever is standing here now. On this site it holds echoes
-          for the moment; the voices follow.
+          today; the voices follow.
 
   - name: Draw another
     description: >